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To what extent do the benefits of information technology outweigh the disadvantages?

#information #technology
In the contemporary world,
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 is considered as the utmost wealth of an organization or an individual. the development of
information
technology
 is playing a crucial role in
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everyone's
day to day
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 life.
although
 there
is
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 some drawbacks
in
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 the advancement of
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information
technology
, the uncountable
benifits
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benefits
 always outweigh the disadvantages. through
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i
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 submit my strong evidence to support my opinion.
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, the global economy
is depending
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 on
the
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IT. what
i
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 mean by
this
 is that
,
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 every political and
economical
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decisions
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require
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 proper
information
 to be
effictive
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effective
.
for example
, in
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Sri Lanka
Srilanka
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srilanka,
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 there was a big economic crisis which affected all citizens'
livelyhood
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livelihood
 which was the effect of the poor
decision making
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 of the political leaders who used the lack of
information
. but if they
have
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a
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proper knowledge related to the use of advanced
information
technology
, they could have
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 that.
secondly
, the fruitful use of
this
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technology
 related to data
defenetlly
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definitely
help
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 to make
good
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 plan and implement that.
for instance
, there is a friend in my neighbourhood, who has proper knowledge of using
this
technology
, developed a start-up which
help
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the
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people
to
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buy and sell their used products in the secondary market. now the application is used by many people in our country. In conclusion, without
information
technology
, it is difficult to manage even a single daily activity in the current
fast moving
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 environment. Even though some
mis-use
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misuse
 of it, the
benifits
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benefits
 outweigh them all.
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Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic

IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.

Answer structure for the type of essay

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – advantages
  • Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • The main advantage is...
  • The disadvantage of this...
  • The main benefit...
  • Despite these advantages...
  • One possible drawback...

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