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The table shows the number of medals won by the top ten countries in the London 2022 Olympic Games .

The table shows the number of medals won by the top ten countries in the London 2022 Olympic Games .
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The table gives information regarding the
amount
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number
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 of models
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that were
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were
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was
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 accepted
via
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by
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ten countries in the London 2012 Olympic Games.
Overall
,
it is clear that
gold
, silver ,
bronze
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and bronze
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were
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apply
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recieved
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received
 the highest proportion
by
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in
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United
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the United
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 States
while
 Hungary got the lowest proportion in all three categories . In China and Great Britain first
recieved
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received
 29 and 24 numbers from
gold
 but the next categories were got 27 and 23 in China from silver and bronze .
However
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However,
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 Great
Britain ' s
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Britain's
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 rate was lower namely 17,19 . If
i
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I
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campared
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compared
compare
 with Rassia and
south
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South
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 Karea , south Karea showed
total
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a total
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number
 of 28 but Rassia 's total
number
of
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apply
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was 82. Germany
as well as
 France almost got similar total numbers which were 44,34 .
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 , Germany and France took
same
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the same
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 numbers from
gold
 but
others
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the others
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 were not
same
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the same
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 level . In
camprision
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comparison
,
Italy
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Italy's
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 and Australia's total levels were very different
in
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at
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which
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apply
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28,35. Among other
countries
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countries'
country's
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gold
 rate Australia got the lowest
number
 but Hungary's total
number
of
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apply
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was 17
that
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which
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 was the lowest result as
campared
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compared
 with
others
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others'
other's
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 result . In
gold
 and bronze silver
were
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was
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 put just 8, 4,5 results via Hunger were almost lower.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words gold, number with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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