The table shows the number of medals won by the top ten countries in the London 2022 Olympic Games .

The table shows the number of medals  won by the top ten countries in the London 2022 Olympic Games .
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The table gives information regarding the
amount
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of models
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were
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accepted
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ten countries in the London 2012 Olympic Games.
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,
it is clear that
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gold
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, silver ,
bronze
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and bronze
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were
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recieved
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received
the highest proportion
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United
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States
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Hungary got the lowest proportion in all three categories . In China and Great Britain first
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received
29 and 24 numbers from
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but the next categories were got 27 and 23 in China from silver and bronze .
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Great
Britain ' s
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Britain's
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rate was lower namely 17,19 . If
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campared
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compared
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Karea , south Karea showed
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a total
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number
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of 28 but Rassia 's total
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of
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was 82. Germany
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France almost got similar total numbers which were 44,34 .
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, Germany and France took
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numbers from
gold
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but
others
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the others
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were not
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the same
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level . In
camprision
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comparison
,
Italy
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Italy's
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and Australia's total levels were very different
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which
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28,35. Among other
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gold
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rate Australia got the lowest
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but Hungary's total
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of
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was 17
that
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was the lowest result as
campared
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compared
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others
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result . In
gold
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and bronze silver
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put just 8, 4,5 results via Hunger were almost lower.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words gold, number with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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