The table shows the number of medals won by the top ten countries in the London 2022 Olympic Games.

The table shows the number of medals  won by the top ten countries in the London 2022 Olympic Games.
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The table gives information regarding the
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of models that were accepted in different countries in the capital of the UK in the 2012 Olympic Games.
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,
it is clear that
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gold
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, silver and bronze received the highest proportion in the United States
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Hungary got the lowest share in all three categories . China and Great Britain first received 29 and 24 numbers from
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but the next categories were got 27 and 23 in China from silver and bronze .
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, Great Britain's rate was lower namely 17,19 . If compared with Rassia and South Karea , south Karea showed a total
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of 28 but Rassia 's total
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was 82. Germany
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France got similar total numbers which were 44,34 .
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, Germany and France took the same numbers from
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but the others were not at the same level . In comparison, Italy's and Australia's total levels were very different at 28,35. Among other countries'
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rates, Australia got the lowest
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but Hungary's total
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was 17 which was the lowest result as compared with other's results. In
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and bronze silver was put just 8, 4,5 results via Hunger were almost lower.
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