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The two maps below show road acces to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010. To summerise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The two maps below show road acces to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010. To summerise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The two pictures display the development of the
city
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 hospital in the given years. In 2007, the
city
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 hospital was in the north and it was surrounded by the Ring
Road
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. Moving to the south, There were two junctions in the
center
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 and south, one
is
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 between a Hospital
Road
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, which went from north to south, and Ring
Road
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 and the other
is
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 between Hospital
Road
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 and
City
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Road
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. The location of the bus stops was on the left and right sides of
the
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Hospital
Road
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. There was a staff and public
car
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park
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 next to the right bus stops. In 2010, the public
car
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park
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 and the staff
car
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park
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was
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 separated. The location of the staff
car
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park
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 was still the same place. Yet, the public
car
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park
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’s location was moved to
right
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 side
the
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of the
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 hospital
city
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. The Hospital
Road
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 was added with two roundabouts. In general, there was a higher demand for the parking space and the bus station.
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