The map below shows the changes that have taken place at the waterfront area of a town called Darwin between 2009 and 2014.

The map below shows the changes that have taken place at the waterfront area of a town called Darwin between 2009 and 2014.
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The given chart compares the household expenditures of five European nations in four distinct categories, namely food and beverage, accommodation, clothes and recreation. It is clear from the chart that housing and daily eating and drinking are the most costly areas for all the countries,
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clothing and entertainment take up a significantly lower proportion of money spent on them. Turkey has the highest share of food and beverage spending, accounting for more than one-third (36%) of its total expenditure, followed by Spain with a slightly lower amount, at 31%. Housing
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consumes the largest proportion of expenditure for all the countries except Turkey. The UK has the highest figure, at 37%,
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Spain has the lowest, representing one-fifth (18%). France and Germany have similar percentages, at roughly one-
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Turkey’s proportion is considerably lower, at 20%. The difference between the countries’ proportions of recreation spending is minimal, ranging from 10% to 14%.
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, it is worth noting that Turkey, which has the highest percentage of food and drink, has the lowest in recreational activities, at just 10%. Germany has the highest percentage, at 14%. The clothing category shows
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similar pattern, with Germany having the highest percentage, at 15%, and France having the lowest, at only 8%.
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