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Education should be accessible to people of all economic background. All level of education from primary school to tertiary education should be free. To what extent do you agree with this opinion.

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Knowledge
 has always been used as a goal for humanity. I believe
knowledge
 should be available for anyone who seeks It. There would be
cost
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 for providing It but I think the end
justify
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 the means. If we live in a utopia where everyone could have access to
knowledge
,
then
 anyone could reach
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any desired outcome. The possibilities are endless. You would no longer be bound by money. The economic chains would no longer shackle you. Any one man could reach any possibility he desires. Some could
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 to go for things they never would have because lack of money
whould
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would
 be a large
hinder
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 for them. Throughout
the
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history
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Knowledge
 has always been a topic only available to those who are rich and powerful. If we want to allow everyone from any position to be able to lead a happy life,
then
 we should give them the opportunity to break the cycle of poverty and ensure a better future for themselves. With enough education, There wouldn't be any social disadvantage as anyone with any past and family would be able to seek education. In conclusion, I believe that we should strive for equality and try our best to find enough funds and resources to increase our living standards. One of the most important
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 in my opinion is
knowledge
. Though
quality
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the quality
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 of
this
 type of education would be in question, I think trying our best to reach
this
 desired outcome would be the only solution.
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Task Achievement
Task response requires you to answer all parts of the question fully. Your opinion should be clear throughout the essay. Support your points with relevant examples and explanations. Avoid unsupported statements and try to develop each idea thoroughly.

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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • equality
  • fundamental right
  • socio-economic
  • skilled workforce
  • investment
  • prosperity
  • social mobility
  • financial barriers
  • welfare state
  • cycle of poverty
  • living standards
  • overcrowded
  • strained resources
  • quality of education
  • economic feasibility
  • reallocating budgets
  • sustainable
  • subsidized education
  • tuition fees
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