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Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

#summarise #information #features #comparisons
The table illustrates
the
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how males and females spent their time
last
 year
with
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at
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 two different day times which are morning and
afternoon
.In general, a greater percentage of
morning
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the morning
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woman
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women
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 spent time
with
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on
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houseworks
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housework
. On the other side morning
mens
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men
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 spent their time with job hunting
last
 year. Morning
mens
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men
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 and
afternoon
mens
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men
percentages
 not
chanced
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 in decorating and playing sport but sitting around
percentages
 is different.In
mornings
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the mornings
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,
mans
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the male
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 percentage
is
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 three, but in
afternoon
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the afternoon
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 the number was three times higher than
morning
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in morning
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man
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men
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.The
percentages
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percentage
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 of morning
woman
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women
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 in decorating was just a little higher than
afternoon
woman
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women
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 percentage.In gardening, the
percentages
 were
noticablly
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noticeably
 different from each
others
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other
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 between
male
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males
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 and females.In
afternoon
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the afternoon
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 playing
sport
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sports
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 rates were
exiting
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exciting
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, the
mens
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men
percentages
 stayed at four in
morning
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the morning
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 and
afternoon
 but in
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the mornings
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mornings
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morning
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woman
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women
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 played four times low than men.Surprisingly, in afternoons
woman
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women
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 never played
sport
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sports
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. In summary, there was
wide
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a wide
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 difference between housework
on
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for
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mornings
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morning women
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woman
 and
afternoon
woman
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women
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.Drinking
percentages
was
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were
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 not changed in
womans
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women
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, but men
drinked
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drank
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 more in
afternoons
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the afternoons
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.There was no difference between
moring
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morning
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 men and morning
woman
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women
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 in staying in bed
percentages
.
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