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The line graph below shows the number of annual visits to Australia by overseas residents. The table below gives information on the country of origin where the visitors came from. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information given.

The line graph below shows the number of annual visits to Australia by overseas residents. The table below gives information on the country of origin where the visitors came from. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information given.
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The data given respectively presented by the line charts and the table inform the annual
number
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 of visits in
Australia
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 in
four-decade
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a four-decade
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period
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 from 1975 to 2005 and the
number
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 of
visitors
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 by
country
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 origins for six different places in 1975 and 2005.
Overall
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, it is notable that the
number
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 of tourists visiting
to
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Australia
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 significantly
increasing
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 three times from the very first
period
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 recorded in 1975 to 2005.
Besides
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, throughout
30-year
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a 30-year
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period
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 of observation, Japan
consistenly
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consistently
consistency
 became the largest
contributors
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contributor
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 to
the
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apply
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Australia
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's tourism by its
number
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 of
visitors
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. In 1975, the
number
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 of overseas residents in
Australia
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 recorded as many as 10
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millions
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million
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visitors
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. By the time passed a decade, and two decades later, the total of tourists increased to 15
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millions
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million
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 and 25
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millions
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million
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 respectively. By the end of the observed
period
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,
Australia
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 hosted 30
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millions
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million
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visitors
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 to their
country
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 in 2005. Regarding
by
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its
country
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origin
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of origin
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, Japan placed and remained
as
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in
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 the first rank for
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number
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a number
the number
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 of tourists visiting
Australia
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 by the end of
given
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a given
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period
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 as many as 12
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millions
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million
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visitors
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. Meanwhile, China is the least
country
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 to visit
Australia
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 by the
number
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 of
visitors
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 recorded as many as less than a million
visitors
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 in 2005.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, australia, period, visitors, country, millions with synonyms.
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