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The development of tourism contributed to English becoming the most prominent language in the world. Some people think this will lead to English becoming the only language to be spoken globally. What are the advantages and disadvantages to having one language in the world?

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English has now become the
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toung
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tongue
 in the globe and for that credit goes to
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evoluation
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evaluation
evolution
in
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 tourism.
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 has made some people believe that English will become the only
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language
 to be spoken worldwide, There are
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benifits
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benefits
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trend
 which are
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elaborated
. On
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one
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 hand, speaking only
one
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language
 will make communication easy for some people. When two
person
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speak
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same
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language
 it will become easy for them to understand each other.
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, English is the fundamental
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language
 in most
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the
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countries where
student
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 learn
this
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language
 at
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 young age.
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, almost everyone
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this
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,
hence
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 conversation between locals and foreigners
have
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 become easier.
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, a survey
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conducted
 by a prominent tourism firm
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 found
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 foreigners who are
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comfortable
in
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communication
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communicating
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 with locals will
recommand
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recommend
 tourist place to others.
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, talking
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one
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tongue
 will destroy the diversity in culture. Cultural drawbacks will make individuals of each tribe
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forget their own roots.
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,
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language
 represents culture.
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, having
one
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language
 may lead to the death of the other
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language
 which eventually turn into
loss
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a loss
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 of tradition
wg=hich
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which
 may lead to
fall
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a fall
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of
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 tourism
buisness
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businesses
.
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, people prefer to travel only because of cultural diversity. In conclusion, easy communication and no
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language
 barrier are
the
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positive
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whereas
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 loss of diversity and loss of other
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languages
 are negative.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Prominent
  • Contribute
  • Global
  • Advantages
  • Disadvantages
  • Communication
  • Understanding
  • Ease
  • Business
  • Trade
  • Cultural exchange
  • Unity
  • Access
  • Information
  • Simplify
  • Travel
  • Tourism
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