you are not satisfied with the changing rooms in the sports center that you visit .write a letter to the manager. what the problem is how feel about the problem what steps you want the manager to take

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Dear Mr. Williamson, I hope

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email finds you in radiant health and well. I am writing

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letter to inform you about the changing rooms in the sports

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with, I have been using your sports

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for two months, and needless to say,

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the facilities provided by the sports

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are good except for the changing

room

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. The changing

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is not spacious, though more than 20 members using that

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at a time.

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, people have to change their wet clothes after having an exercise. But it is a matter of sorrow that

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the small changing

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, people have to wait in a queue long time.

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type of service creates dissatisfaction among the members. I would suggest some ideas to mitigate these problems.

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, you can expand the size of the existing changing

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with 5 more feet.

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, stop hiring new members to keep the

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crowd-free. I am looking forward to your kind reply regarding

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matter. Yours sincerely, Faisal

Submitted by faisalmahamood on Fri Dec 01 2023

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task achievement

Ensure you provide a detailed explanation of the issues with the changing rooms, offering clear and practical suggestions for improvements.

coherence cohesion

Make sure there is a clear and logical progression of ideas throughout the letter.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 6.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

8 paragraphs

174 words

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you are not satisfied with the changing rooms in the sports center that you visit .write a letter to the manager. what the problem is how feel about the problem what steps you want the manager to take

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

Increasing the price of petrol is the best way to solve the growing traffic problem. 1.Do you agree or disagree. 2. What other measures do you think might be affected.

The rise of convenience foods has helped people keep up with the speed of the modern life. What are the advantages of this trend? Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

Some people consider price as the most important thing to think about when buying products (such as cell phone) or service (e.g. medical treatment). Do you agree or disagree?

Children brought up in families with less money are better prepared for life than those from wealthy families. To what extent do you agree or disagree?