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The chart below shows how frequently people in the USA ate in fast food restaurants between 2003 and 2013. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows how frequently people in the USA ate in fast food restaurants between 2003 and 2013. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The graph provides information on the frequency of Americans visiting the unhealthy
food
 cafeteria in three years (2003, 2006, and 2013). The data reveals that most US
people
 went there once a week. It can be seen that less than five
percent
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per cent
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 of Americans
consume
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consumed
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 fast
food
 every day in 2003, 2006, and 2013.
In addition
, in 2003, five
percent
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 of them admitted that they never went there, as did less than five
percent
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per cent
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 of them in 2006 and 2013.
Moreover
, visiting the unhealthy cuisines cafeteria several times a week was only 17% of Americans in 2003, climbing to
one fifth
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 in 2003, and a slight fall in 2013.
Further
, they came to junk
food
 restaurants a few times a year, less than 15% of them in 2003, and 15% in 2006 and 2013.
Nevertheless
,
one third
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 of the American
people
 said that they visited the fast
food
 restaurant once a week in 2003, slightly increased in 2003 and modestly decreased in 2006. The numbers were almost similar with the USA citizens who went to that place once or twice
in
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a month, with details: 30% of
people
 in 2003,
one quarter
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one-quarter
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 of
people
 in 2006, and
one third
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one-third
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 of
people
 in 2013.
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words food, people, one with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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