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around the world, many animals species become extinct. Some people believe that countries and individuals must try to solve this problem .Others believe that concentrating on problems of human beings is more important than those concerning species. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

#world #animals #species #people #countries #individuals #beings
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extension
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 of wildlife has extensively grown all around
world
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the world
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. Some people argue that the government
as well as
 the people should preserve the
lifes
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lives
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 of animals.
While
,
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 some people think that problems faced by human beings should be given
previlage
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privilege
. I believe that both issues should be solved concurrently. In
this
 essay, I will review both
side
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 of the debate. On the one hand, there is no doubt that animals are an essential part of
ecosystem
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the ecosystem
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 which needs to
be preserve
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 by the organisation for their survival in the future.
Moreover
, biodiversity requires wildlife, so that it can flourish and grow more.
For instance
, if all
carnivores
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 animals will extinct from the forest
then
 herbivorous in the forest will consume all the flora and fauna
thus
, it will diminish the environment and it will
also
 disturb the food chain.
On the other hand
, human
being
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has
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 played a vital role in
the
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society, like evolution of the civilization or domestication of the
wild life
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wildlife
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.
Secondly
,
human
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the human
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 population has more influence over
the
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spices
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species
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. Humans can help in
preservation
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the preservation
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 of ecology and in
develop
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 new ways to conserve the world. In my opinion protection of the endangered species of animal and life of
the
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human beings should go hand-in-hand.
Government
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The government
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 should invest more funds and resources to save the lives of the creatures around the globe.
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