the maps below shows an industrial area in the town of Norbiton, and planned future development of the site

the maps below shows an industrial area in the town of Norbiton, and planned future development of the site
The given diagrams illustrate the transformation of the Norbiton industrial
area
before and after development.
Overall
, factories in the current industrial
area
will be replaced by housing areas.
Additionally
, there will be facilities
such
as shops, a hospital, a playground and a school close to the housing
area
. The current industrial
area
in Norbiton consists of several factories in between a road and a
river
.
In addition
, on the north
side
of the
area
, there is a
river
and
a
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farmland beyond the
river
.
While
on the west
side
, a town can be found. After the future development, there will be the demolishment of the factories and housing
complex
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are going to be constructed. Starting on the north
side
of the
area
, the
river
will be separated into two by a road which leads to more housing.
Furthermore
, farmland will be maintained and surrounded
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farthest north housing
area
. In the Far East, a school and a playground are planning to be introduced. Meanwhile, a medical centre and shops will be developed on the south
side
of the
area
.
In addition
to those facilities, new straight and roundabout roads will be added.
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