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the maps below shows an industrial area in the town of Norbiton, and planned future development of the site

the maps below shows an industrial area in the town of Norbiton, and planned future development of the site
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The given diagrams illustrate the transformation of the Norbiton industrial
area
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 before and after development.
Overall
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, factories in the current industrial
area
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 will be replaced by housing areas.
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, there will be facilities
such
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 as shops, a hospital, a playground and a school close to the housing
area
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. The current industrial
area
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 in Norbiton consists of several factories in between a road and a
river
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.
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, on the north
side
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 of the
area
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, there is a
river
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 and
a
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farmland beyond the
river
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.
While
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 on the west
side
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, a town can be found. After the future development, there will be the demolishment of the factories and housing
complex
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 are going to be constructed. Starting on the north
side
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 of the
area
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, the
river
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 will be separated into two by a road which leads to more housing.
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, farmland will be maintained and surrounded
the
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 farthest north housing
area
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. In the Far East, a school and a playground are planning to be introduced. Meanwhile, a medical centre and shops will be developed on the south
side
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 of the
area
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.
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 to those facilities, new straight and roundabout roads will be added.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "in addition".
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words area, river, side with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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