The first chart below shows how energy is used in an average Austrailian household. The second chart shows the greenhouse gas emissions which result from this energy use.

The first

pie

chart

illustrates how much

energy

is used

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each

reason

in Australian

farm

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. The second

pie

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gives information about greenhouse

gassing

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because of

this

energy

using

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. In general,

proportion

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the proportion

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of reasons

energy

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using

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are

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substantially changed and

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of gassing

is surged

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. As is presented in the first

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, the main

reason

why

energy

is used is heating, which

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just under half part. The second

reason

is water heating, which is nearly

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of

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chart

, refrigeration is used

an

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insignificant minority of

energy

. Meanwhile, lighting and cooling

is

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used only

a

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tiny function of

energy

, which

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is insignificant. When it comes to other appliances,

by

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this

cause

is used

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a small minority

energy

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. As can be seen in the second

chart

,

proportion

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of gassing

is

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differed from the previous

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. It can be clearly observed that the

proportion

of refrigeration by gassing is soar,

also

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reversed when it comes to lighting and other appliances, the proportions

is

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doubled

in

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both

reason

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.

However

, the per

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of heating is reduced by greenhouse gassing. It is worth noticing that, the

proportion

of water heating and cooling

have

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not

significant

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changes

by

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the

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result

from

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energy

use.