The first chart below shows how energy is used in an average Austrailian household. The second chart shows the greenhouse gas emissions which result from this energy use.

The first

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chart

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illustrates how much

energy

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is used

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each

reason

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in Australian

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. The second

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gives information about greenhouse

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because of

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energy

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using

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. In general,

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proportion

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of reasons

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energy

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using

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are

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substantially changed and

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proportion

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of gassing

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. As is presented in the first

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, the main

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why

energy

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is used is heating, which

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just under half part. The second

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is water heating, which is nearly

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, refrigeration is used

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insignificant minority of

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. Meanwhile, lighting and cooling

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used only

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tiny function of

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, which

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is insignificant. When it comes to other appliances,

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a small minority

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energy

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. As can be seen in the second

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,

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proportion

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of gassing

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differed from the previous

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. It can be clearly observed that the

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of refrigeration by gassing is soar,

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the pattern is not

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reversed when it comes to lighting and other appliances, the proportions

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doubled

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, the per

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of heating is reduced by greenhouse gassing. It is worth noticing that, the

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of water heating and cooling

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not

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changes

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result

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