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The bar graph shows the global sales (in billions of dollars) of different types of digital games between 2000 and 2006

The bar graph shows the global sales (in billions of dollars) of different types of digital games between 2000 and 2006
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The chart illustrates data about the worldwide
trades
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trade
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 of various types of numerical
games
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 during 6 years from 2000 to 2006 It can be seen from the graph that the sales of
the
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handhold
games
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 increased gradually from 11
billion
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dollars
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 to 18
billion
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dollars
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 between the years 2000 and 2006.
Ont
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 the other hand the
trades
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trade
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 of
the
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console
games
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declained
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decreased
 moderately from 6
billion
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dollars
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 to 2
billion
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dollars
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during
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 6 years respectively. First of all,the market
of
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the
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online
games
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 began to grow in 2001. And
then
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online
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the online
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games’
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games
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 market went up gradually between 0,5
billion
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dollars
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 and 9
billion
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dollars
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form
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from
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 2001 to 2006.
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Furthermore
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 mobile phone
games
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 rose steadily between 2002 and 2006, reaching a peak of about 7
billion
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dollars
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at the end
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 of the period. In 2006 , the market
of
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for
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the
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console
games
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were
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 the lowest figure in the chart with about 3
billion
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dollars
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.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words games, billion, dollars with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Trends
  • Surpassed
  • Advent
  • Steady growth
  • Fluctuating sales
  • Technological advancements
  • Proliferation
  • Year-on-year growth
  • Factors influencing
  • Peak sales
  • Demographic shifts
  • Engagement
  • Driving the sales
  • Blockbuster titles
  • Major game releases
  • Spurring
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