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The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular caribbean island between 2010 and 2017. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular caribbean island between 2010 and 2017. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph demonstrates the visitor’s
number
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 vacating a specific Caribbean
island
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 in the
time
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 interval between 2010 and 2017. There are three lines on the graph one shows the total
visitors
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 the other two outline
visitors
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 staying on the
island
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 and
visitors
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 staying on a cruise ship.
Overall
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, the total
number
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 of person who visits the
island
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 generally went up. There is only one
time
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 that it is plateaued.
Also
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, the
number
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 of
visitors
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 staying on the cruise ship shows a general increase
except
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except for
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 the times between 2011 and 2012.
Finally
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, the
number
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 of
visitors
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 staying on the
island
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 fluctuated. In detail, the total
number
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 of
visitors
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 was 1
million
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 in 2010 and 3,5
million
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 in 2017. It showed
continuous
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a continuous
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 increase except for the
time
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 between 2015 and 2016.
This
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 one year was stabilised. Other than that, the
number
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 of
visitors
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 staying on the cruise ship
also
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 showed continuous growth except
the
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in the
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 years between 2011 and 2012. During that
time
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 it showed a decrease from 0,5
million
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 to 0,25
million
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.
Moreover
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,
visitors
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 staying on the
island
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 considerably fluctuated. It stayed stabilised
the
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in the
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 years between 2010 to 2011 and 2013 to 2015.
While
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 the
number
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 of people was nearly 0,75
million
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 at the beginning (in 2010) it ended up at 1,5
million
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.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, island, time, visitors, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stabilised" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fluctuated" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fluctuating trend
  • initially
  • significant increase
  • slight decline
  • momentary setback
  • steady increase
  • minor fluctuations
  • reaching a peak
  • moderate growth
  • notable growth
  • surge in popularity
  • seasonal or yearly factors
  • stagnation
  • growing appeal
  • visitors worldwide
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