Countries are becoming more and more similar because people are able to buy the same products anywhere in the world. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

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It is said that, Nowadays, There

are

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a massive

similarity

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between the nations.

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using the same products.

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some people believe that there are several benefits

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this

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resembling, I believe the drawbacks, Which will be discussed, Are more substantial.

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with, There is no doubt that there are some benefits from

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similarity

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. One of

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this

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benefits is the increment in commercial activity.

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of consuming the same items.

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, the number of

job

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jobs

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in trade exchange operations will increase.

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, Apple stores

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apply

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are available in every

countries

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country

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one of them that has provided numerous

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opportunities.

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, all goods will be available in their towns

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of waiting

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much for their orders.

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, the main problem

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this

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similarity

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is that

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transporting

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goods can lead to

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invironmental

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environmental

issues.

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is because

consuming

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of consuming

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fossil fuels, which is releasing carbon dioxide in the atmosphere.

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the increment of carbon dioxide in our atmosphere

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will accelerate

global

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the global

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warming process and cause extinction for some animals. Another issue another issue will happen

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this

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resembling, Is the loss of self-identity for each country.

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will be no difference in religions or cultures because of the impact of

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trend. In conclusion, From my

perspetive

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perspective

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similarity

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between the nations has negative aspects more than its

psitives

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positives

positive

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The loss of

self identity

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self-identity

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this

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reason

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we must preserve each identity

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every country

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

252 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

globalization
diversity
homogenization
cultural assimilation
global connection
local businesses
economic impact
consumerism
standardization
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