The Pie chart gives information about the country of birth of people living in Australia and the table shows where people born in these countries live. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The Pie chart gives information about the country of birth of people living in Australia and the table shows where people born in these countries live.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The pie chart depicts
percentage
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the percentage
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of
people
in
Australia
who
was
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were
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born in diverse countries and the table
illustrated
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the number of city
dwellers
and rural residents. 
According to
the pie chart, it is seen that the vast majority of
population
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the population
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in
Australia
consists of indigenous
people
with 73%
from
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of
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all inhabitants. The second and the third positions are taken by
Netherlands
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the Netherlands
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and
UK
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the UK
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with 14% and 7%, respectively. The proportion of other countries where
Australia
's
dwellers
were born
in
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is
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insignificant and varies from 1% to 3%.  Probing
further
to the table,
similar
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the similar
a similar
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trend may be noticed as regardless
the
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of the
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country number of city
dwellers
prevails over livers from rural areas equating to more than 80% and reaching 90%.
However
, china is an
exclusion
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exception
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as almost all
people
, 99% precisely, live in cities
what
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which
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is 9% more than in
case
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the case
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of
Australia
,
UK
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the UK
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, New Zealand and
Netherlands
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the Netherlands
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. The percentage of Chinese
people
living in rural areas is the lowest
one
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apply
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amounting to only 1%.
Overall
, Australian
people
forms
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form
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the major part of
population
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the population
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in
Australia
. What is more, a
tendancy
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tendency
of living
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to live
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in cities is widespread in
Australia
as the quantity of urban
dwellers
overcome
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overcomes
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rural livers from all countries.
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