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the chart below shows the total number of mintues in billion of telephone calls in the UK divided into three categories.

the chart below shows the total number of mintues in billion of telephone calls in the UK divided into three categories.
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The graph chart displays the total number of minutes in billion
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telephone calls in the UK between 1995 and 2002. There are three types of telephone calls.
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, as you can see obviously, on the one hand, the local-fixed line increased and decreased gradually between 1995 and 2002.
On the other hand
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, both the National and international and Mobiles (all calls) just increased constantly between 1995 and 2002.
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, the Mobiles went up significantly. In local-fixed line, it increased from more than 70 to 90 between 1995 and 1999,
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, it decreased again from 90 to around 72 between 1999 and 2002. And in national and international gradually and constantly increased from around 37 to more than 60 between 1995 and 2002. And the
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 chart, the Mobiles went up from around 4 to more than 10 continually and gradually between 1995 and 1999, but suddenly, jumped up exponentially from more than 10 to 45 between 1999 and 2002.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "went up" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 3 times.
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