In the future all cars, buses and trucks will be driverless. The only people travelling inside vehicles will be passengers. Do you think the advantages of driverless vechiles outweigh the disadvantages?
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the
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apply
beigns
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beings
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have
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mode
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According to
my perspective, the disadvantages of this
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will be outweighed Correct your spelling
attitude
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advantages.
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a scarcity
the scarcity
driver's
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driver
system
. Fix the agreement mistake
systems
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, truck, texi
, and bus driver's jobs in danger, and they have to look for other options to earn their livelihood. Correct your spelling
taxi
Moreover
, the safety of passengers is at risk as automatic mode
might not be as effective and efficent
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efficient
like
humans to drive in busy cities like Toronto. Correct word choice
as
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, there was an incident Correct pronoun usage
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that happed
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in New York, when the automatic Verb problem
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chaos happened
vehicle
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vehicles
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colluded
to
each other.
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with
On the contrary
, there are some benefits which are associated with driverless cars. First
and foremost advantage of Correct article usage
The first
this
is money and time
saviour. Governments or cities no
need to hire drivers as cars Correct your spelling
do
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buses run automatically, Correct your spelling
or
the
money Correct word choice
and the
which
they spend on drivers as their salary would be used for Correct pronoun usage
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another purposes
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another purpose
other purposes
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, one can save Correct your spelling
Secondly
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time
as they do not need to pick and
drop Change preposition
up and
its
near and dear ones, the same Correct pronoun usage
their
time
could be invest
in learning new skills or household chores.
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be invested
be investing
its
beyond doubt that by the presence Correct your spelling
it is
od
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of
auto drive
cars, Add a hyphen
auto-drive
human
can save a sum chunk of money and Fix the agreement mistake
humans
time
, nonetheless
, auto drive
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auto-drive
mode
might be compromised
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compromise
passengers
safety as Change noun form
passengers'
passenger's
its
less effective Correct your spelling
it is
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comparison Correct your spelling
in
of
humankind.Change preposition
to
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