In recent years, there has been a significant increase in the number of oil drilling operations in remote locations around the world. This has brought economic benefits to some countries, though it has also raised concerns about the environmental impact of these operations. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion.
In
isolated
part of Add an article
an isolated
world
, more Add an article
the world
number of
Correct quantifier usage
apply
oil
drilling operations are carried out and many believe that it will have significant benefit to economy
of a nation Add an article
the economy
while
other argues
that it Change the verb form
argue
posses
serious Wrong verb form
possesses
environment
implications. Replace the word
environmental
Moreover
, I believe it will have negative
impact on Add an article
a negative
environment
. Add an article
the environment
However
, in this
essay
we will discuss both sides with suitable examples.
On the one hand, Add a comma
essay,
oil
drilling in remote locations has significant
effect on the Add an article
a significant
environment
. During oil
drilling process, it releases Add an article
the oil
adequate
amount of Add an article
an adequate
the adequate
green house
gases which have Correct your spelling
greenhouse
significant
impact on Add an article
a significant
earth
causing Correct article usage
the earth
increase
in global temperature. Add an article
an increase
the increase
Moreover
, during initial setup, oil
spillage is common on water
Add an article
the water
surface
which not only causes water pollution but if it is not controlled, it will have Fix the agreement mistake
surfaces
prolonged
Correct article usage
a prolonged
affect
on marine life. Replace the word
effect
For example
, As per report
published by Add an article
a report
the report
climate
control agency of Europe, Correct article usage
the climate
From
Change preposition
In
last
few years with the increase in Correct article usage
the last
number
of Change the article
a number
the number
oil
rigs, melting
rate of Correct article usage
the melting
Add an article
the glacier
glacier
has increased by thirty Fix the agreement mistake
glaciers
percent
.
Change the spelling
per cent
On the other hand
, development
of more Correct article usage
the development
oil
drilling platforms helps country
in increasing Add an article
the country
their
revenue. Correct pronoun usage
its
Oil
rig operations not only provide livelihood to the people living in that area but also
makes
that Correct subject-verb agreement
make
country
self sufficient
in energy. Add a hyphen
self-sufficient
Moreover
, country
can earn foreign exchange by exporting Add an article
the country
a country
oil
to other nations. For instance
, as per study
revealed by Correct article usage
a study
leading
economic news paper, Correct article usage
a leading
from
Change preposition
in
last
few years, Correct article usage
the last
growth
rate of Add an article
the growth
a growth
oil
exporting countries have been
increased from four to ten percent Wrong verb form
has
where
Rephrase
apply
as
for other nations Change preposition
whereas
its
still below five percent.
In conclusion, Replace the word
it's
it is
although
oil
drilling in remote locations helps country
Add an article
the country
in generating
more dollars Wrong verb form
generate
but
Remove the conjunction
apply
due
to release of Change preposition
apply
green house
gases during Correct your spelling
greenhouse
drilling
process Correct article usage
the drilling
it
negatively affects the Correct pronoun usage
apply
environment
. Due to
lateral reason
, I believe Fix the agreement mistake
reasons
drilling
of Correct article usage
the drilling
oil
from remote location
should be reduced so that Fix the agreement mistake
locations
earth
can be protected from Correct article usage
the earth
adverse
Add an article
the adverse
an adverse
effect
of pollution.Fix the agreement mistake
effects
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