In recent years, there has been a significant increase in the number of oil drilling operations in remote locations around the world. This has brought economic benefits to some countries, though it has also raised concerns about the environmental impact of these operations. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion.

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drilling operations are carried out and many believe that it will have significant benefit to
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we will discuss both sides with suitable examples. On the one hand,
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drilling in remote locations has
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drilling process, it releases
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causing
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in global temperature.
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spillage is common on
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which not only causes water pollution but if it is not controlled, it will have
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on marine life.
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few years with the increase in
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of
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rate of
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has increased by thirty
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drilling platforms helps
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revenue.
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rig operations not only provide livelihood to the people living in that area but
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self sufficient
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in energy.
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can earn foreign exchange by exporting
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to other nations.
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increased from four to ten percent
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still below five percent. In conclusion,
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drilling in remote locations helps
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to release of
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gases during
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process
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negatively affects the
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, I believe
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of
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from remote
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should be reduced so that
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can be protected from
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of pollution.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Extraction industry
  • Fossil fuels
  • Renewable resources
  • Sustainability
  • Ecosystem
  • Biodiversity
  • Greenhouse gases
  • Carbon footprint
  • Ecological balance
  • Socio-economic development
  • Non-renewable resources
  • Environmental degradation
  • Sustainable development
  • Climate mitigation
  • Energy transition
  • Ecological footprint
  • Corporate social responsibility
  • Pollution control measures
  • Economic diversification
  • Resource exploitation
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