Some people think that parents should teach children how to be good members of society. Others, however, believe that school is the place to learn this. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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people
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kids
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good
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members
of their country is the
parents
' responsibility whilst others' perspective is that
children
should
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this
at school. As
children
spend much time at school and with their family, both of them play
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role in raising youngsters. In
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will discuss both views and give my opinion.
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one
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hand,
parents
have influenced
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their offspring from being toddlers to becoming a
matture
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mature
person
. So that,
children
can be brought up as a
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beneficial
individuals in society by their mothers and fathers.
Parents
can teach them by themselves behaviours
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practically
since they imitate their
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attitudes and follow their manners to others.
For example
, helping elderly people or being polite.
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, fathers and mothers are a significant and efficient pattern for their
children
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excellent
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people
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among
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nation
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the nation
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.
On the other hand
, students should be taught the advantages of being a positive
person
in their country and even in the world and
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the disadvatages
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disadvatages
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disadvantages
of being a negative
person
through theoretical and practical lessons.
For instance
, they can learn discipline by doing their homework and duties on time
as well as
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up
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older people.
Moreover
, schools as a small society should consider rewards for teenagers who are
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beneficial
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to encourage other students. In conclusion, In my
opinion
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both
parents
and schools have impacted
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kids
noticably
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noticeably
.
parensts
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Parents
are their offspring patterns before they
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become
mature and they do whatever their families and relevant do. so they are
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effective teachers to
learn
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them
be
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a good
person
in the future.
Likewise
, schools and
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trainers
are essential environments and sources to develop and raise
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in a positive way.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • good members of society
  • teach
  • parents
  • schools
  • responsibility
  • values
  • respect
  • empathy
  • responsibility
  • formal education
  • citizenship
  • ethics
  • social responsibility
  • lead by example
  • role models
  • conducive environment
  • extracurricular activities
  • community involvement
  • collaborate
  • holistic approach
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