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The maps below show the layouts of nature Museum between 2010 and 2013

The maps below show the layouts of nature Museum between 2010 and 2013
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The diagrams provide information about the changes in the
Nature
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Museum
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 between 2010 and 2013.
Overall
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, the
nature
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museum
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 underwent a number of dramatic changes, the most important of which are the disappearance of a garden and the development of some facilities. The weast of the
nature
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museum
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 saw a number of transformations, with the mammal area being expanded and replaced by the ice age and insects gallery to ensure that it can provide various choices to visitors.
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, the ocean hall in the centre was extended in order to contain more people.
In addition
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, the Dinosaurs and lobby areas in the south of the
nature
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museum
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 are kept in place.
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, there used to be a garden in the east of
this
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museum
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, but it was redeveloped into an area that was used for displaying mammals, human origins and shops and coffee sectors to help parents observe their children meantime chatting with friends.

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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words nature, museum with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "provide" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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