While many people go to university for academic study, more people should be encouraged to do vocational training because there is a lack of qualified workers such as electricians and plumbers. Do you agree or disagree?
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while
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institutions
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lack
of qualified Correct article usage
a lack
workers
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such
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plumbers
. I firmly disagree with Use synonyms
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the drawbacks
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whereas
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lack
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workers
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plumbers
, no one appreciates these jobs. A good example can be my school where students do not value their hard work and just neglect them.
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lack
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such
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workers
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is highly needs
more service employees because these jobs will be forever relevant. Change the verb form
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plumbers
deeply connected with our routine lives and Add a missing verb
is plumbers
overall
household repairs. Research has shown that in the US a big shortage of Linking Words
plumbers
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consequently
, many people have faced challenges with maintenance.
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quilified
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