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Some people believe city life is getting more difficult whereas others think it’s becoming easier. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

#people #city #life #it’s
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In our modern world, many people are likely to live in a
city
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 compared to previous
time
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times
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. Living in a
city
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 brings
it’s
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 own pros and cons, and at that point, a question comes to
minds
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: whether living in a
city
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 is becoming challenging. It can easily stated that
city
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life
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 is becoming easier gradually, with the increased number of delivery services and improved public
transport
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 infrastructure.
Firstly
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, one of the reasons why residing in a town is becoming
more
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easier is risen delivery services. Owing to these services those people, who live in a
city
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, do not have to spend their time
for run
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 errands or
groceries
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grocery
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 shopping. Imagine that a figure who is living in a
city
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,
this
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 figure easily can purchase some items, like some groceries or paper towels, via a mobile app, and a delivery guy will arrive in an hour. Since these applications are not available in suburbs, individuals who live in suburbs
are need
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 to go to a market and buy these items by themselves.
It
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 understandable that the second
scenerio
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scenario
 is more time and
energy consuming
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energy-consuming
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.
To sum up
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, one should always keep in mind, with the new applications and their pervasive usage, cit
life
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 is becoming less difficult.
On the other hand
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, in terms of daily
life
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, since the majority of the
city
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 residents are working, it is essential to access their workplace
effortless
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. Let’s think of a
city
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 every workers are trying to reach their workplace via their own car. It may lead to congested traffic and air
pollutions
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pollution
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, and both of them can affect the
indivudual’s
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individual’s
life
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 badly.
In particular
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, heavy traffic may make people’s
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life
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lives
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 challenging. The general landscape was like that in many cities until recent days.
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, for the
last
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 5
years
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years,
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this
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 negative profile has changed, with the investments in the public
transport
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 infrastructure.
As a consequence
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 of developed infrastructure, people have started to prefer using
subway
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the subway
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 or buses
than
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 their own cars.
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, their efforts, which usually are spent to access their workplace in the early morning have decreased in recent years. To wrap up, thanks to the refreshed public
transport
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 systems, living in a
city
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 has become
more
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apply
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easier.
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, all the things are taken into account, I, personally, believe that
city
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life
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 is easier than before. Not only new brand mobile
application
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applications
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 but
also
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 improved public
transport
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 make
city
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life
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 more comfortable. Governments and individuals should continue to make
effort
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efforts
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 to make
city
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life
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eaiser
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easier
 for the sake of their
residents
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resident's
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life
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 satisfaction.
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coherence cohesion
The essay follows a structured format with an introduction, body, and conclusion. However, to enhance the logical flow and structure, ensure that each paragraph focuses on a singular main idea and appropriately transitions to the next paragraph. This will help your essay to flow in a more coherent manner.
coherence cohesion
The introduction and conclusion are present but can be improved. The introduction should clearly state the topic and outline the structure of the discussion, while the conclusion should summarise the main points and express your opinion more definitively. Be certain your conclusion aligns with the arguments presented in the body of the essay.
coherence cohesion
The essay provides some support for the main points, but the arguments would benefit from a deeper exploration and more varied sentence structures. Enhance your supporting sentences with more complex ideas and use cohesive devices to better connect your ideas and examples.
task achievement
You have provided a partial response to the task with your opinion stated at the end. To improve, directly address the task prompt immediately in the introduction, clearly stating both views before providing your opinion. This helps in achieving a full response to the task.
task achievement
The ideas are relevant to the topic, but they need to be communicated more comprehensively. Expand on your ideas with further explanations and implications, which will add depth to your discussion and demonstrate a clear understanding of the topic.
task achievement
You've included relevant examples, but try to integrate a wider range of specific instances that illustrate the points made. This will help in demonstrating a thorough understanding of how these aspects influence the difficulty or ease of city life.

Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

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...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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