The Graph below gives instragram about the percentage of the population in four asian countries living in cities from 1970to 2020 with prediction for 2030 and 2040.

The Graph below gives instragram about the percentage of the population in four asian countries living in cities from 1970to 2020 with prediction for 2030 and 2040.
The pair of maps indicates that the medical centre had changed between the
year
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2008 and 2010.
Overall
, it can be seen that the plan of
medical
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centre showed dramatic changes, especially doctors and
patients facility
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patient facilities
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have increased. In the first
map
, it can be seen that there was a main entrance south
side
of the
map
and
large
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a large
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waiting
room
exists for the patients.
Besides
, left
side
of the waiting
room
a laboratory
room
situated
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.
A part
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from these rooms, there was a corridor, office
staffs
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staff
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,
doctors
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and doctors
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,
used
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it
for went
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to
doctors’
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the doctors’
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office and treatment
room
.
Further
, three doctors’
room
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rooms
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have
built
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been built
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north
side
of the
map
. In 2010, the medical centre looked more
facilited
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facilitated
facilities
for the patients. Doctors’ offices have increased. In north
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part of the
map
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a store
room
added
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was added
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.
Similarly
, In the east
side
and south
weasten
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western
eastern
part
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parts
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of the
map
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map,
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a store
room
, education
room
and
mother child
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mother-child
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room
built
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were built
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.
However
,
remaining
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all rooms remained unchanged like
staff
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the staff
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office, reception, laboratory and treatment
room
.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words map, side, room with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 6 times.
Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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