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Describe a writer you would like to meet. You should say: who the writer is what you know about this writer already what you would like to find out about him/her and explain why you would like to meet this writer.

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, he is a monk and a leader of 7 million
Tibetan’s
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 inside and outside of Tibet. He is
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 than His
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 the Dalai Lama. I am familiar with his writings on Buddhist psychology ,
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it
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reminds
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about
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compassion,
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 it helps one's own mind to keep
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 towards harmful actions or faulty language spoken to oneself. It was stated in one
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 that the compassionate mind helped him to survive his spirit. The eagerness came from that statement in one of his books that I want to meet him in
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 to ask him how
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that helped him to stay spirited. It was in his biography that he did have had
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 1950s
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 he lost his country’s Independence and had to flee his own country.
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coherence cohesion
Provide a clear introduction, body, and conclusion in your essay. Each paragraph should serve a specific purpose, with the introduction setting the scene, the body elaborating on your ideas, and the conclusion summarising your points.
coherence cohesion
Ensure that ideas flow logically from one to the next. Use transitional words and phrases to guide the reader through your essay, and make sure that each sentence supports the overall argument or point being made.
task achievement
Clearly address all parts of the task, ensuring you fully develop your response to each prompt. Your essay should not only identify the writer you wish to meet but also expand on each aspect of the question in detail.
task achievement
Include more specific examples and details about the writer's work, your understanding of it, and the questions you'd like to ask. This will make your essay more engaging and show a deeper level of understanding.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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