Organised tours to remote communities and other countries are increasingly popular. Is it a positive or negative development for local people and the local environment? To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Thanks to technological advances, nowadays, there are a plethora of organised tours to diverse countries which are making
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better and more enjoyable. Some believe that it has numerous benefits
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the development of the local
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and environment,
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others argue that it can lead to
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and surroundings. But I strongly agree that organised tours should be avoided for the evolution and consistency of individuals and nature. First and foremost, tourists impact the residents in a bunch of aspects. They can exchange ideas and broaden their horizons just by talking
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on a small scale. Certainly, it contributes to the better performance of
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forthcoming future.
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, with
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experiences, you can acquire knowledge about nations’ history, culture, identity and
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beliefs which would help you to expand your understanding of the world more clearly.
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, visitors influence the course of the local environment. They often litter wherever they go and do not bother to clean after themselves in
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they have visited.
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may lead to unexpected conditions,
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as dirty roads or clogged sewage systems in these places, which
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negative and direct impacts on local
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’s living conditions. To give an example of indirect effects, in several mountainous
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of Vietnam, local
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cut down vast
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of forest to make handicrafts or furniture for tourists. These acts can contribute to the environmental deterioration in remote
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. In general, declining the number of organised trips helps society in multiple aspects.
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it has several benefits for the locals, it doesn’t outweigh the negative influence of planned journeys. I believe that enhancements occur when the nations are not distracted by external factors.
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