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The bar chart shows men’s and women’s prize money at golf majors in 2010.

The bar chart shows men’s and women’s prize money at golf majors in 2010.
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The given bar chart compares the amount of
prize
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money
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 won by
men
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 and
women
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 at various golfing
competitions
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 in 2010.
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,
men
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 tended to earn substantially more
money
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 than
women
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 in each of the
competitions
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 where both sexes participated. In the
two
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women
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-only
competitions
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, the average
prize
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money
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 was
also
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 considerably lower than the one in which only
men
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 competed.
According to
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 the bar chart, in the ANA and Evian Championship majors, which were open only to
women
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, winnings were under $500,000.
In contrast
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,
prize
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money
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 for the
men
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-only Masters golf major was nearly
two
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 million dollars. In the three championships in which both
men
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 and
women
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 compete, the US Open, the Open Champ, and the PGA, there was a strikingly similar trend. Male winnings were almost triple those of female earnings in
two
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 of them,
while
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 in the US
Open
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 they were double. Female
prize
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money
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 fell between $500,000 and $800,000,
whereas
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men
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’s winner earnings began at just under
two
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 million dollars, with the US Open winnings, the most lucrative of the
competitions
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, higher than that.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words prize, money, men, women, competitions, two with synonyms.
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