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the chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018

the chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018
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The bar chart illustrates
percentage
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the percentage
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 of families' weekly expenditures compared to weekly incomes in 1968 and 2018. The expenditures are classified into eight groups. In general, household mostly spent their income
for
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on
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 food in 1968.
In contrast
, leisure was the most significant
expenses
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expense
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 in 2018.
While
 other categories
were fluctuated
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fluctuated
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, household goods
maintained
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remained
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 stable. In 1968, families spent more than a third of their incomes
for
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on
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 food (35%) and it decreased
half
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by half
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 to 17.5% in 2018. Other significant expenses
was
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were
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 housing
as well as
 clothing and
footware
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footwear
 which is 10%.
On the other hand
,
biggest
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the biggest
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 expenditure in 2018 was leisure which increased approximately triple.
Other
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Another
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 significant expenditure in 2018 was housing
that
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which
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 rose almost double (19%).
In addition
, transport increased mostly 5%.
In contrast
, other groups which dropped were fuel and power, clothing and
footware
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footwear
,
personal
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and personal
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 goods. Both in 1968 and 2018, families spent
least
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the least
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 on fuel and power not more than 10%.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "in contrast".
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Weekly income
  • Expenditure
  • Consumption patterns
  • Cost of living
  • Discretionary spending
  • Inflation
  • Economic indicators
  • Demographics
  • Socio-economic factors
  • Technology advancements
  • Government policies
  • Consumerism
  • Lifestyle changes
  • Fiscal habits
  • Budget allocation
  • Financial priorities
  • Societal trends
  • Purchasing power
  • Income distribution
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