The first chart below shows the results of a survey which sampled a cross-section of 100,000 people asking if they travelled abroad and why they travelled for the period 1994-98. The second chart shows their destinations over the same period. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below.

The first chart below shows the results of a survey which sampled a cross-section of

100,000 people asking if they travelled abroad and why they travelled for the period

1994-98. The second chart shows their destinations over the same period.

Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below.
These charts provide us with
a poll information
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poll information
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about
consideration
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the consideration
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of 100000 Britain citizens who asked about
they
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their
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travel destinations and
whom
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their
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intentions of
this
travel over a
four year
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period between 1994-1998.over
all
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what
inferred
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from the first chart is that there
were
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an incremental trend in
number
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a number
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of people that had burning desire for travelling with verity of aims that travel with recreational goals was most prevalent .beside
this
the western Europe is most adored destination for
this
questioned people and
this
sector have seen a dramatic sour in number of visitors in given period of time. If we look more closely
to
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figures
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, we will figure out that the holiday is
most
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popular reason for travelling among the Britain residents its figure started at 15243 in 1994 and after a temporary
falling
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in 1995 with 14894 have witnessed a substantial
fly
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fall
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until 1998 with 20700.
in addition
, western Europe was
most
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a most
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privileged area for
England
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population with 19371 in 1994 and in accordance with
this
data about
holiday
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after a
falling
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in 1995 with 18954 have faced strikingly soar to 24516 in 1998.
by
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respect to business,
this
host reason for travelling commenced at 3155 in 1994 and slightly
growth
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to 3958 in 1998. By a glance at visits to friends and relatives, data illustrate that
this
aim
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in
third
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step in the term of passengers intention with 2689 in 1994 and have fronted with a moderate upward trend and
raising
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to 3181 in 1998.on top of
this
north America
have
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achieved the third
popular
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most popular
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destination with 919 in 1994 and virtually doubled in 1998 with 1823.
by
contrast
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other
reason
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reasons
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for travelling have grasped with a fluctuation between 982 and 990in
given
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a given
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period
time
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of time
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and did not possess a vivid trend.
However
, the booming of other regions
have
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had an incremental tendency so that it started at 981 in 1994 and
have
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reached 1489 in 1998.if we investigate the total statistics we can deduce that
individuals
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aspire
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for travelling
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to travel
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had
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been rocketing so that it
begun
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began
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at 22072 in 1994 and touched
the
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28821 in 1998.
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