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The most important aim of science should be to improve people's life. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#aim #science #people #life
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this
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 with adverted and intricate
science
, every facet of your circumstance that you can envisage
have
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 been revolutionized. Several of these alters ameliorate the human thornier suffering and some of which put a tremendous strain and burden on our shoulders.
to
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 my way of thinking, any
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 phenomenon that
derived
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 from
science
 must have oriented toward
human
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humankind
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kind
 life qualities improvement.
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science
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 until now provided
human
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 with inexhaustible amenities that can alleviate
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difficulties.
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 of the most evident instant
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 in the prehistory era to the AI in
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kind
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do
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 not possess the ability to dominate and
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 any resource of
this
 world and utilize them for
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his
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intentions
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 attainment.
Consequently
, in all ages
science
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humankind
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kind
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, a growing number of individuals hold
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that if we
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 take the breakthroughs that have been merged by
science
 under our governor we will confront with influx and massive avalanche of insurmountable disasters. You can take
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standing,
this
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thirsty
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 for authority.
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 a result, we could not jump to
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 that
science
settle
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 in the harsh contrasting of human well-being. All aforementioned
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drives
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 me to a concrete
prospective
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 that, despite the fact that
science
 invariably
have
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 been in
human
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kind
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for improving
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whom
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 life situation , it must have undertaken moral supremacy and
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malevolent
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 person.
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