Below is a map of the city of Brandfield. City planners have decided to build a new shopping mall for the area, and two sites, S1 and S2 have been proposed. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

Below is a map of the city of Brandfield. City planners have decided to build a new shopping mall for the area, and two sites, S1 and S2 have been proposed. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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This
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map indicates a
city
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named Brandfield which is going to have some changes in the future. First of all, it is clearly evident that the golf course and park occupy the majority of the map.
There
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are located
at
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in
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the western
part
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.
Beside
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that, in the central
part
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of the
city
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, we observe
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city
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the city
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centre which is quite large.
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, in the northern region of
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the city
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city
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city,
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there are housing states for
residence
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residents
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.
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to a small state for industrial activities in the western
part
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. It is crystal clear that there is a river which
begin
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from the north to the south-western area.
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, a
curve
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shape road
is passing
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the
city
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from north to south, and
finally
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, a limited railway is
acrossing
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crossing
a crossing
across
from the north-western region to the south-eastern area. What's more, urban planners are going to
built
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build
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a new bazaar in two parts which are in the
norhtern
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northern
part
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next to the houses and the south-western zone
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besides
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railway
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the railway
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. In sum, despite some changes that are going to happen in the northern and southern parts of the
city
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, other places are going to stay
unchange
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unchanged
.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words city, part with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "map" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • city planners
  • proposed
  • shopping mall
  • the main features
  • comparisons
  • advantages
  • disadvantages
  • recommendation
  • site selection
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