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The chart below shows the number of households in the US by their annual income in 2007, 2011 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the number of households in the US by their annual income in 2007, 2011 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart compares the figures for
families
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 in various stages of income in the United States in three separate years.
Overall
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, the households who earn $50000 - $74999 per year and $75000 - $99999 per year were far less than the number of the other kinds of
families
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while
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 the figure for
families
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 earning less than $25000 was consistently lower than that for
families
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 earning between $25000 and $49999 and they remained a slight gap over the 8-year period.
Firstly
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, the lowest numbers of
families
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 (earned $75000-$99999) got a slight decline from 14
million
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 in 2007 to 13
million
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 in 2011, and grew to reach 15
million
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 over the next 4 years.
However
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, the second lowest income stage of
families
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 (earned $50000- $74999) remained stable at around 21
million
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 between 2007 and 2015. The two types of households that earned less than $49999 had seen a similar trend during the 8-year period.
Families
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 earned less than $25000 grew to reach from just over 25
million
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 in 2007 to 28
million
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 in 2011
while
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 another type of household increased from 26
million
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 to just under 30
million
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 at the same time, followed by a slight decline( 1
million
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 for both) by 2015.
In addition
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, the figure for those homes who gain a salary of more than 100000 per year was consistently just less than 30
million
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,
however
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, it peaked at 33
million
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 by 2015 which was the largest group of total
families
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.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however, while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words families, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • household distribution
  • income brackets
  • annual income
  • percentage change
  • trend analysis
  • income group
  • significant increase/decrease
  • steady growth/decline
  • fluctuations
  • compared to
  • in contrast
  • notably
  • median income
  • poverty line
  • economic factors
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