the chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018.

the chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018.
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data about
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families in one country waste their income between 1968 and 2018.
reagarding
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it is clear that
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precentage
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food
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higher proporation
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goods in 1968. , it was about 35%
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personal
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goods rate
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only about 4%.
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20%in 2018.But food stead in 15% and 20%.Household goods in no have any change it is up 5%.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Weekly income
  • Expenditure
  • Consumption patterns
  • Cost of living
  • Discretionary spending
  • Inflation
  • Economic indicators
  • Demographics
  • Socio-economic factors
  • Technology advancements
  • Government policies
  • Consumerism
  • Lifestyle changes
  • Fiscal habits
  • Budget allocation
  • Financial priorities
  • Societal trends
  • Purchasing power
  • Income distribution
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