The chart below gives information about the most common sports played in the UK in 2008.
This
bar chart depicts data about the ratio of people playing 9 popular sports in the UK in 2008.
Overall
, there was a distinction in both genders joining different activities. While
swimming attracted the most players, the opposite could be seen in jogging.
With 25% participation, netball was a female sport, 25 times more than men
. Similarly
, swimming and jogging were more favourable for women, at 14% and 4% respectively.The rate for jogging was the lowest, at 7% for both sexes, which was only one-fifth of 38% of people who opted for swimming.
On the other hand
, 24% of males took part in soccer, the rate for men
was 4 times higher than for females. Although
10% of men
chose cricket, there was only 1% of women interested in this
sport. Other sports witnessed a number of men
participating twice the figure for women. Finally
, a minimal difference between males and females was witnessed in tennis and basketball, at 7% and 6% respectivelySubmitted by cathyngo1512 on
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