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What do you think the government in your country (THAILAND!) should do to make your country more successful (better)? (Provide one or two suggestions to improve a situation which is your country Thailand)

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It is generally known that
Thailand
 is a top destination for overseas tourists, and
also
 a great distributor in Asia.
Nevertheless
,
Thailand
 is still a developing country
due to
 a variety of issues.
Hence
, the
Thai
government
 should concentrate on improving fundamental factors.
Firstly
, public service in
Thailand
 should be developed. Many
Thai
people
spent
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 a lot of time on the road
due to
 traffic congestion.
Consequently
, the
Thai
government
 may consider enhancing the accessibility and convenience of public transportation in order to reduce public transit costs.
Moreover
, the
government
 might implement universal design theory to construct public transportation systems to accommodate disabled persons.
For example
, the
government
 may construct more moving walkways, a lift, or
a
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apply
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special
path
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paths
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 for disabled
people
 in public areas
such
 as train stations, tourist attractions, shopping centres, and so on. These convenient factors might help increase the number of tourists in
Thailand
.
Secondly
, the
Thai
government
 should be focusing on learning and teaching the
English
 language in the
Thai
 education system. As the fact that
English
 does not originate from the
Thai
people
, it is
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therefore
 the most widely spoken language in the world.
Thus
,
English
 study must be advantageous for the
Thai
people
. A large percentage of
Thai
 citizens are hesitant to learn
English
due to
 their lack of familiarity with the language. The
government
 may improve
English
 instruction and learning by laying the foundation for
English
 education at school and
encourage
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 students to widely use
English
 in actual life. In conclusion, I believe that in order for
Thailand
 to advance, the
government
 should prioritise improving public services to cater to the needs of all citizens.
Moreover
,
establish
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establishes
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 the groundwork for an
English
 instructor and study to enable
Thai
people
 to communicate effectively and fluently in
English
.
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