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The graph shows the amount of fruit produced in four countries (France, Spain, Germany, Turkey) from 1970 to 2010.

The graph shows the amount of fruit produced in four countries (France, Spain, Germany, Turkey) from 1970 to 2010.
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The line graph gives information about how much
fruit
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 was produced in four large countries , namely ,
Spain
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 , Turkey , France and Germany, ranging from 1970 to 2010. Units are
showed
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 in
tonnes
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.
Overall
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, it can be noticed from the flow chart that
Spain
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 had the greatest amount of food
production
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, among other countries, in four given decades. As for the other three nations , they tried to overtake each other over time. Focusing on the year
of
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1970 , the biggest amount of the
production
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 belonged to
Spain
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 ( over 5
million
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tonnes
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 ). France had the lowest total which was above 1 000 000 000 kilograms. When it comes to the
production
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 of Turkey and Germany , they
had
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both produced nearly 2 and 2.5
millions
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million
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of
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tonnes
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 of
fruit
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 respectively. Examining the final decade, there
had been
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was
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 a slight decrease in the percentage of producing of
fruit
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 in
Spain
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 and stood at almost 5
million
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tonnes
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. Looking at the
production
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 of Turkey , we can see that it has increased gradually over time and reached to little under 4
million
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tonnes
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 of
fruit
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 .
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,
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 there was a gradual increase in the amount of producing
fruit
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 in France , the proportion of the
production
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 of
fruit
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had
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decreased little by little and showed over 1
million
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tonnes
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.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 83%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words fruit, spain, tonnes, production, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "gives" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • produce
  • trends
  • decrease/increase
  • production
  • peak
  • fluctuation
  • stability
  • volatility
  • significant
  • milestone
  • conjecture
  • harvest
  • agricultural
  • yield
  • decade
  • data representation
  • timespan
  • graph analysis
  • comparative
  • rankings
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