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The bar chart shows the distribution of employment among agriculture, services, industries in three countries in 1980 and in 2020

The bar chart shows the distribution of employment among agriculture, services, industries in three countries in 1980 and in 2020
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The chart illustrates the
employment
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 among
agriculture
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,
services
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 and industries in three
countries
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 in 1980 and 2020.
Overall
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, the chart shows that
country
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 A has the highest
services
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 in 2020 compared to other
countries
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, B has the highest
agriculture
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 per
cent
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 and
country
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 C has the very lowest per
cent
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agriculture
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 in 1990 and 2020.
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 with in every
country
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 as three distribution
employment
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agriculture
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,
services
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, industries in
country
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 A
services
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 as more per
cent
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 compare to other two
countries
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 in 1990 as 42 % and in 2020 as 52 % and very lowest in
country
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 A in both the years is
agriculture
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. On the other side,
Country
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 B has the very highest percentage in
agriculture
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 63% in 1990 and 43% in 2020 and the very lowest is industry
employment
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 which surprisingly in 2020 to 48 %
Country
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 C has a very low per
cent
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 in
agriculture
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 compared to other both
countries
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 which just 1% in both the years and highest in service
employment
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 of 62 per
cent
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 in 1990 and in 2020 80 per
cent
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 and in
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industry 37 per
cent
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 in 1990 and 23 per
cent
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 in 2020.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words employment, agriculture, services, countries, country, cent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 3 times.
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