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The table describes the changes of people who went for international travel in 1990, 1995, 2000 and 2005. (million). Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

The table describes the changes of people who went for international travel in 1990, 1995, 2000 and 2005. (million). Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.
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The table illustrates the proportion of
people
 who went for international
travel
 in 1990, 1995, 2000, and 2005. By selecting and reporting the main features the information given in the table will be summarised in
following
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the following
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eassey
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essay
.
Overall
, it is
noticable
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noticeable
notable
 that the proportion of
people
 who
travel
 from
Europewas
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Europe was
 the highest.
While
 the percentage of Asia and Pacific was the smallest.
Moreover
, the percentage of all was increased except America.
Firstly
, the
amount
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number
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 of
people
Wrong verb form
travelling
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travel
Verb problem
travelling
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 from
asia
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Asia
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 and the
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Pacific
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pacific
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Pacific
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 was 60.2 in
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the year
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year
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the year
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apply
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of
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apply
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1990 and gradually increased and reached 135.8 in the year
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apply
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of
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apply
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2005.
However
, the
amount
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number
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 of
people
travel
Wrong verb form
travelling
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 from
Middle
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the Middle
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 East is
more
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apply
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lesser than
all
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in all
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 other countries.
Furthermore
, all other countries have less progress but
the
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apply
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America has another dimension. America didn't see any progress in
given
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the given
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 years. With regards to travelling from
country
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one country
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 to another country
The
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apply
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Asia and the
pacific
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Pacific
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holds
Correct subject-verb agreement
hold
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 the first position. The least amount
got
Verb problem
was
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 by the Middle East .
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 71%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, travel with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • International travel
  • Million
  • Trend
  • Gradual rise
  • Significant jump
  • Technological advancements
  • Increased affluence
  • Globalization
  • Rate of increase
  • Low-cost airlines
  • Ease of travel
  • Tourism promotion
  • Regional differences
  • Cultural exchange
  • Economic impact
  • Environmental concerns
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