the charts below give information on the ages of the populations of yemen and italy in 2000 and projections for 2050. summarize the information and make comparison. wrtie at least 150 words.

the charts below give information on the ages of  the populations of yemen and italy in 2000 and projections for 2050. summarize the information and make comparison. wrtie at least 150 words.
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The pie charts provide information on the populations of Yemen and Italy in the year 2000 grouped into three age classes and predictions 5 decades later.
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, in both
countries
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those within the range of 15-59 will account for a large proportion of the
population
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in 2050. In the year 2000 in Yemen, of the total
population
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, slightly above half of the people (50.1%) were younger than fifteen, 46.3% were below 60
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only 3.6% were well above 60. In 2050, there will be a different trend
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most of the people in the 15-59 age bracket (57.3%)
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the proposed drop in the percentage of citizens who fall in the bracket 0-14. As for the older
population
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, they will only account for 5.7% of the
population
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. Most of the Italians in 2000 were 15-59 years and
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will not change as
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age class will account for 46.2% of the
population
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5 decades later.
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there was a drop in
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bracket, the teenagers aged fourteen will grow in amount
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up 42.3% of the total number years later.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words population with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "drop" was used 2 times.
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