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Some people think that printed books are not necessary in the digital era, as all writing can be stored electronically. Others believe that printed books still play an important role in our lives. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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As digital technology can save all writing, people have different views about whether printed
books
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necessary.
Although
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 technological advancement and convenience are undeniably significant, I firmly believe that printed
books
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 will continue to play a crucial role in our lives. Indeed, all
information
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 can be accessed easily through varied digital
devices
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 like
smartphone
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smartphones
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 and
laptop
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laptops
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. These
devices
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 provide lots of storage space for diversified forms of
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such
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 as audio, text or video,
thus
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 physical storage mediums like
books
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unnecessary
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.
Furthermore
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,
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storing
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stored
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 on electronic
devices
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 can enable people to access conveniently.
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, whenever and wherever need to use that
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, people just open
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 mobile device and connect internet,
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then
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 the
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 can be extracted, which cannot be done in
books
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However
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, the
advantage
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advantages
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 of storage and
convenient
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to
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meaning
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meanings
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 for printed
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In contrast
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, printed
books
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 are significant for cultural implications and personal styles, especially valuable manuscripts and paintings.
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 record in paper
present
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presents
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 multiple
style
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 through various brushstrokes to express
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the emotion
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emotion
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emotions
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 of writers and painters, which cannot be represented by digital
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Additionally
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, printed
books
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 are a safe way of saving knowledge because it is not easy to modify the original words once they are printed on paper. If printed
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 are not available any more, the knowledge
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 online can be edited without leaving a trace, which means, knowledge that has been tested before would be spread wrongly. In conclusion, printed
books
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 have an irreplaceable meaning and value.
While
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 the development of digital
information
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 has a lot of advantages, it is crucial to recognize paper book is indispensable for culture and individual.

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structure
Work on creating a more defined and clear structure by using paragraphs that each contain a singular main idea or argument. This will improve the logical flow of your essay and make it easier for the reader to follow your points.
introduction/conclusion
Ensure that the introduction and conclusion are clearly demarcated and fulfill their specific purposes. The introduction should introduce the topic and set the tone for the essay, while the conclusion should effectively summarize the key points and restate your opinion.
support
Develop your main points with more supporting details and concrete examples. Each point should be expanded with explanations or evidence that clarifies and illustrates the argument you are making.
task response
Ensure you have answered all parts of the task with a developed response to each aspect of the question. Remember that you must discuss both views mentioned in the prompt and provide your own opinion clearly.
clarity
Improve the clarity and comprehensive nature of your ideas by refining your sentences and vocabulary to express your thoughts more precisely and avoid any ambiguities or overgeneralizations.
examples
Use relevant and specific examples to support your arguments. These examples should be clearly connected to the point you are making and rich enough in detail to substantiate your claims effectively.
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