The maps below provide the variations which have occured at Queen Mary since its construction in 1960.

The maps below provide the variations which have occured at Queen Mary since its construction in 1960.
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These are maps showing the Queen Mary Hospital in 1960, 1980, and 2000 and the developments that have occurred.
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, noticeable features were the addition of a
centre
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which enlarged over the next two decades, the introduction of additional sites
as well
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the enlargement of the hospital. In 1960, just to the left of the facility, a shopping complex was constructed and below it
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the farming area and the Car Park. There was a major road which served the Queen Mary building at the very top. In the successive twenty years, the hospital was expanded to house a pharmacy for the sale of drugs and what was usually a shopping
centre
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became a
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Oncology. The Farmland was modified into a school of nursing and maintained the position just next to the Car Park. By 2000, the Cancer
Centre
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was
further
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expanded occupying almost half of the space and some of the area mapped out for the nursing school, moving the school
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to the right.
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