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The chart below shows the expenditure on three categories among different age groups of residents in the UK in 2004. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the expenditure on three categories among different age groups of residents in the UK in 2004. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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the money spent on three categories (
food
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 and
drink
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, restaurant and hotel, and entertainment) among several different
age
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groups
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 of UK citizens in 2004. Units are measured in per cent.
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, the biggest
expenditure
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 spent on
food
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 and
drink
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 was witnessed by the
age
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group
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 30.
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, the
age
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group
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 30
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 had the highest
percentage
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 of total spending on restaurants and hotels.
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, for the entertainment category, the
age
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group
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 of 61-75 experienced the greatest
percentage
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 compared to those of the other
age
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groups
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. Based on the chart, the
percentage
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 of total spending in terms of
food
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 and
drink
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 increased gradually as the
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age
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 of each
group
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. The smallest
percentage
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 of
food
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 and
drink
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expenditure
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 was in the
age
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group
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 30 (just over 5%)
whereas
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 the biggest
percentage
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 was in the
age
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group
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 76+ (around 23%). In terms of spending on restaurants and hotels, the
age
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group
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 under 30
expenditure
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 (almost 15%) was the highest among the other
age
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groups
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 as opposed to the lowest
expenditure
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 which was the
age
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group
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 76+ (approximately 7%).
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 the
age
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group
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 of 31-45 and 46-60 had a similar number of spending which were around 12%.
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, with regard to
expenditure
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 on entertainment, the
percentage
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 of the
age
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group
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 61-75 (about 23%) was significant compared with other
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groups
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.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "moreover".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words food, drink, age, groups, expenditure, group, percentage with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Expenditure
  • Categories
  • Age groups
  • Residents
  • Summarize
  • Main features
  • Comparisons
  • Trends
  • Patterns
  • Spending habits
  • Life stages
  • Childcare costs
  • Healthcare costs
  • Outliers
  • Economic factors
  • Social factors
  • Cultural factors
  • Leisure activities
  • Financial outlays
  • Demographics
  • Percentage
  • Allocation of funds
  • Consumption
  • Discretionary spending
  • Essential expenses
  • Generational differences
  • Income bracket
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