Many University students live with their families, while others live away from home because their Universities are in different places. What are the advantages and disadvantages of both situations?
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students
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While
this
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resides
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study
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them to
implusive
people because they are working after Correct your spelling
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studies
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employment
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of Add an article
The outcome
this
Teenagers might realize Correct article usage
the values
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value
In addition
, University
students
have more time for
acquire their academic subjects to be more specific independent Change preposition
to
student
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students
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distractions
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demands
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makes
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financial
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their financial
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there are several cons of Add a comma
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