Many University students live with their families, while others live away from home because their Universities are in different places. What are the advantages and disadvantages of both situations?

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In various nations around the world,

University

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students

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reside with their family members in specific

place

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places

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their

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opponents

who

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live

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in another

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country or city

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their

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from their

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own house.

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phenomenon offers several advantages, there are

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some disadvantages which are worth considering and I will shed some

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higher education institutions pupils'

lifestyle

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. There are two main benefits of

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who live independently.

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young

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generation

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another

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place for

study

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that is

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assisting

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them to

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become less

implusive

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impulsive

people because they are working after

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study

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studies

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hence

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they should

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apply

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earn money through their

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employment

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Outcome

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this

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Teenagers might realize

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values

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of hardworking.

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University

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students

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have more time

for

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acquire their academic subjects to be more specific independent

student

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students

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could be a good cause in point. To explain they don't do house chores and they become less

interruption

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juvenile

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may more

study

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and they should

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achieve

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rewards.

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, various drawbacks may be noted. In the first place,

students

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away from home

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an extreme

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extreme

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extremely

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difficult activity

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for some

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young generations because they do not know other people,

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they should suffer 1st year

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of their

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study

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studies

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. They might become homesick and

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is one of the

distraction

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for learning.

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study

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studying in

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another city or country

is demand

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demands

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much

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a lot of

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money and

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occurrence

make

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difficult

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it difficult

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for parents from circumstance of

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their financial

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condition. In conclusion, on condition that

University

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students

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study

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other

city

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has several benefits

such

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their

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apply

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expands

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horizons.

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there are several cons of

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study

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studying

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far from home like

students

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become

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becoming

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homesick and

financial

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the financial

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condition of parents.

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Ensure that the essay has a clear introduction that sets the context and a conclusion that effectively summarizes the main points. Use more cohesive devices to improve the connection between ideas.

task achievement

Fully address all parts of the task, ensuring a balanced discussion of advantages and disadvantages. Include more specific examples to support your points, and make sure your essay remains focused on the topic throughout.

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Examples make your writing easier to understand by illustrating points more effectively.

Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.

Linking words for giving examples:

for example
for instance
to illustrate this
to give a clear example
such as
namely
to illustrate
take, for example

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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265 words

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Many University students live with their families, while others live away from home because their Universities are in different places. What are the advantages and disadvantages of both situations?

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Nowadays, more people are choosing to socialize online rather than face-to-face. why is this happening? is this a positive or negative development?

Some people consider art to be essential and others think it is not. Which view do you agree with and why? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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