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We should fix the traffic and transportation by making everyone lives in the cities not suburbs or countrysides. What to extent do you agree or disagree?

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In
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 contemporary era, the trend to opt out of urbanization is increasing day by day and the best way to deal with the problem of traffic congestion and easy access to buses, and trains by accommodate people in the cities. I totally agree with
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 view and would like to explain the proponents in upcoming paragraphs. As per my notion, if more people reside in urbanization
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access to every facility, whether it is regarding streets, schools, or anything else.what's more, the denizens of the urban areas
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 will use their own public transportation
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 of using their own cars because fewer parking spaces force them to go by buses and other modes of transport.
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, carbon footprints will be decreased because cars emit abandon of gases and pollute the
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 environment.
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need to leave their adobe to have a wide range of amenities
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 as a children's playground, better extracurricular activities and so on. They will have the all benefits which are required for a better future.
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, youngsters may have more job opportunities and in search of work, they would not need to go ag another location. everything will be available for them in their own place.
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 opine that
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 living in an urban place, the dwellers may have every kind of accessibility in regards to a better job, life standard and children's betterment.
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 rather than giving preference to suburbs, people should live in cities.

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Coherence & Cohesion
The essay presents an introduction and conclusion, though both could be better structured to enhance clarity. Ideas are generally presented in a logical order, but transitions between them could be smoother. It's recommended to use clear paragraphing with topic sentences to lead the reader through your argument coherently.
Task Achievement
You have addressed the task by agreeing with the statement and providing reasons. However, the necessary development of these points is not entirely clear or fully comprehensive; the explanations lack specific detail and examples that would add strength to the argument. It is important to develop clear and well-supported ideas, as well as to represent a broad range of grammatical structures accurately, to achieve a higher score.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Urbanization
  • Infrastructure
  • Sustainability
  • Carbon footprint
  • Public transportation
  • Residential density
  • Economic efficiency
  • Congestion
  • Quality of life
  • Urban sprawl
  • Commute
  • Metropolitan
  • Gentrification
  • Smart growth
  • Zoning regulations
  • Mixed-use development
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