Se should fix the traffic and transportation by making everyone lives in the cities not suburbs or countrysides. What to extent do you agree or disagree?

It is argued that transportation problems can
be solve
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by shifting the
people
to
city
from all
side
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of cities.
This
essay totally
agree
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with
statement
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because countryside
people
get help easily and decrease environmental issue . Gathering of
people
in
metropolitan
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the metropolitan
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area
help
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people
in travelling as in cities they can get help from other
people
and
also
there is
a
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public transport availability which is accessible to everyone
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in moving cities a person
don't
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have to struggle a lot to get
bus
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in contrast
to the
people
of
rular
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ruler
area where
people
serve there half time in journey and don't get enough time for family and leisure activities .
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city
life
help
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public
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the public
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for moving
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here and there . On the
hand
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.
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while
while
living in
area
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near
job
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a workplace
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place
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people
mostly prefer to walk around the
city
to reach
the
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duty which ultimately reduce the number of vehicle and accident which is good for health and
environment
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.
As the
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smoke coming from the vehicles
cause
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air pollution and
lead
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to
the
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air disease and respiratory allergies .
For
example
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in
Malaysia
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Malaysia,
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they shift the worker
into
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near by
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nearby
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place and they all travel by bicycle which reduce
in
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the
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cardiac issues . In conclusion,increasing population in
city
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the city
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may cause bad effects but
it's
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benifts
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benefits
come with more happiness and growth
.country
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country
can cope
up
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apply
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with
transport
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the transport
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issue
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by shifting regular travellers to nearby their destinations .
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  • Urbanization
  • Infrastructure
  • Sustainability
  • Carbon footprint
  • Public transportation
  • Residential density
  • Economic efficiency
  • Congestion
  • Quality of life
  • Urban sprawl
  • Commute
  • Metropolitan
  • Gentrification
  • Smart growth
  • Zoning regulations
  • Mixed-use development
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