The first graph displays which electrical appliances are owned the most of a household, while, the others illustrates how many hours of housework were consumed per week in one country from 1920 to 2019.

The first graph displays which electrical appliances are owned the most of a household, while, the others illustrates how many hours of housework were consumed per week in one country from 1920 to 2019.
The first graph displays which electrical appliances are owned the most
of
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a household,
while
, the others
illustrates
Correct subject-verb agreement
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how many hours of housework were consumed per week in one country from 1920 to 2019.
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