Instead of asking the government to bear the cost of higher education, students should pay their own tuition fees themselves. Do you agree or disagree with this statement?
Some
people
consider that students have to pay their own tuition fees instead
of requiring the government
to support them. I personally disagree with the statement as the executive would still provide a fund even though only a few percent
of the price.
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per cent
To begin
with, pursuing higher education
not only makes people
have a better life but only
increases the prosperity of the Rephrase
also
country
. It is mainly because learning in universities
is related to improving human resources, therefore
raising a better living population in that country
is a state obligation too. However
, the government
has prioritised the country
's income distributed to the education
sector, especially universities
. Hence
, it will be a worthwhile investment both for the country
and society itself.
Moreover
, not everyone has the privilege of a good economic background but has high potential. Tertiary education
is closely correlated to the cost, therefore
this
is a social issue since
the variety of levels of economics in every person. Change preposition
of
In addition
, this
problem would be the main problem that must be resolved by the government
specifically in developed countries as there are more people
from lower
economic class than the other. Correct article usage
the lower
Hence
, the allocation of the
income in developed countries should be prioritised in Correct article usage
apply
education
.
To sum up
, I believe that the government
plays a vital role in people
going to universities
because the funding of higher education
is higher than other educational levels. Accordingly
, the executive of the country
should still provide funding to universities
although
it can not fully
as beneficial Add a missing verb
be fully
of
higher Change preposition
apply
education
is essential for human beings and the state.Submitted by re.li on
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