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Advantages and disadvantages of watching tv give your opinion

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Television
 has long been a subject of debate,
some
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 arguing
that is
 a mere waste of
time
while
 others don't think like that. The majority of houses have at least one
television
. Let's discuss more about the pros and cons of spending
time
 with
television
.
Firstly
,
television
 can give for who watch information and knowledge. News channels keep us updated about what is happening around the world, with a view of
global
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 perspective. You can
also
 see during the news the weather conditions for the next day or week.
This
 is important if you have plans to do an outside activity. Educational programs bring us insights into science, history and culture, it all without you leaving your sofa.
Secondly
, it is a means of relaxation, after you have a difficult day you can sit down and relax watching a documentary, laughing at a comedy or being emotional with a drama.
Moreover
,
television
also
 brings the family together whether seeing a sports program or a TV show on Sundays. On the other point of view is important to say that spending a lot of
time
 watching TV can
leave
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 you to a sedentary life, but it depends on your lifestyle. Moderation is the key. In conclusion,
television
 is not a
time
-wasting and can provide a lot of information, knowledge and fun. Managing your
time
 in front of is the key to keeping a healthy lifestyle.
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